Originally Posted by
dubaiphil
Try to make a note of your flash settings, positions and distances for future reference.
As for seeing the modifiers in your subject's eyes - that's not a problem really. Catchlights give the eyes some life, and without them you will notice a big difference. The light looks very flat and even. This may be what you were looking for, but having one light as your main light and one as your fill light on the subject may give you more depth to the image. The key really is to add light as you need it rather than because you have it!
It may be a case of having too much equipment to play with to start off with. Try just one main light without a second fill light, then introducing a fill light (1 - 3 stops less bright than your main light). Just practice and move the lights around, try getting the umbrellas really close, try taking one strobe off the umbrella and using a snoot (or making one with a dark piece of card) to aim as a hairlight. Try feathering the light, rather than aiming it straight at the subject, to light areas that you want and direct attention from areas you don't want (the creases in the shirt that you haven't taken a liking to, for example!), if you have one, consider trying a using a bounce card/reflector as fill light form your main light instead of using a second flash on the subject, and so on, and so on. Just have a play...!