Portraits. what to improve?

[NetNeko]

learning to make portraits. what can i improve? what i did wrong? will be happy to hear any opinions. thanks in advance.

[Digital]

IMHO these photographs are really good.

Bruce

[Shadowman]

Each has their own merits and your variation in technique will appeal to some and not others. If you present this as a portfolio I am sure potential customers will tell you what they like and don't like. Good stuff, love the eyes in 3, 4, and 5.

[nimitzbenedicto]

Hey, coool shots.

Just that seems there's too much eye-whites in #3 & 4.

Otherwise, all of them rocks.

just me.......

[Manfred M]

Beautifully composed and processed. I probably would have gotten the models to centre their eyes more in shots 2, 3 & possibly 4.

There are some minor issues with shadows and contouring that I might have cleaned up a bit in post.

[NetNeko]

thanks for all your opinions.
yup kinda too much white in eyes.

There are some minor issues with shadows and contouring that I might have cleaned up a bit in post.

may i ask for more details please?

[AB26]

Vey good! Well done!

My only concern is getting the skin tone right with accurate WB.
The lady in #1 could have a serious liver problem, judging by the colour of her skin.

[Manfred M]

thanks for all your opinions.
yup kinda too much white in eyes.

may i ask for more details please?

These are some very small niggley things I picked up. Your work is so good, that the very, very minor things might be looked at, depending on how far you want to go in post.

Image 1 – I would do some minor hair cleanup perhaps. I find that the stray hair camera left a bit distracting and while I were in there, I’d take care of a few strays at the top camera right as well. I assume you did the slightly green colour cast on purpose.

Image 2- I find the fuzzy hair near the top of her head at camera left a bit distracting. I might also clean up the single strand coming down her forehead. There are a couple of places on her index finger that I might clean up to. There is a dark line just above her bottom knuckle and bit of a strange shadow on her middle knuckle as well.

I don't know if I really like the way we see a tiny bit of her teeth or not. I might go both ways to see what looks best (with / without).

Image 3 - the shadow on the left side of her nose looks a bit strange. I would probably lighten that a tiny bit. I’d probably take care of that stray hair on her forehead too.

Image 4 - I don’t like what the shadow is doing under her lower lip. It looks a bit strange; again a bit of lightening there should help. Looking just to the right of her lips towards her cheek, there is a bit of a strange shadow under her cheek; I would be tempted to blend that a bit too; both of those together make it look like she has a bit of a bruised mouth. Again, there are a few stray hairs that could be cleaned up.

Image 5 – The middle part of her nose is a bit indistinct and I would probably add a bit of shadow detail here just to tighten things up a tiny bit. I would probably get rid of the bottom camera right eyelash that sticks out a bit.

Image 6 - I’d clean up the fuzzy hair at the top of her head camera left and might just tone down the bright spot on the camera right eye a tiny bit.

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[NetNeko]

GrumpyDiver thank you.
will try not to make same mistakes in the future. so much to think about >.<

[FootLoose]

#5 - I'd get rid of the cord /wire (whatever) in her hair on the right (about level with her mouth). Also, there is a line on her bottom lip - looks like she hasn't applied the lipstick all the way to the edge of the lip. Whatever it is, I would blend it in with the lower skin on the rest of the lip.