Joe, while I like the composition itself, I find there are a number of technical issues that you might want to think about.
The first thing that strikes me is that the colours are quite muddy. I know we've discussed this before; you should check your white point and black point (and likely the midpoint as well). Tweak those a bit and I suspect you will get a far more pleasing image.
I think you might be hitting the limits of what Lightroom can do for you; I find the foreground much too dark and I'm not sure how much you can recover with the Lightroom's dodge tool; but in my view, the trees and down could really use some lightening up to bring out the details in the foreground and middle ground of this image. Contrast seems a tad low, so I would be tempted to bring that up to add a bit more "pop" to this image.
White balance has no "right answer", as sunset shots are by definition mixed light. I find this view is a touch too yellow, so dialing them back a bit might help too. I haven't really touched the overall exposure, as I don't know what things looked like when you took the shot, but if it were my image, I might be tempted to lighten it up a bit.
I'd also be tempted to add a vignette to direct the viewer's eyes away from the bright top left corner of the shot and more to the middle.
This might give you an idea of what's in my head.