Hi Mark,
I think that at times folks can get so caught up in the peculiarities of night shots that they forget the basics of composition & lighting -- and I think this might be the case here (sorry!). It's just that if I had to put my "finger" on it, I'd say that the scene is "boring" with nothing in particular that draws the eye -- and the lighting is flat and boring too - which for me is why the image just doesn't work (or in other words, we need to get those basics right before we worry about other less important things like processing choices.
Incidentally, I was out shooting last night - I paid particular attention to choosing the composition and getting the lighting right ... and in my opinion the image STILL didn't work (some might think it's OK, but it's not up to my standard, and won't be going on my website).
Sometimes rules are made to be broken -- but at other times we need to respect them.