Originally Posted by
dubaiphil
Hi Wayne. Personally I'm not feeling a connection with Kevin here.
You shot the image at f4 and 75mm on a crop sensor body, and the autofocus has missed the intended target. Kevin's shirt is sharp but is face is in from of the focal plane. Now you were in darkness here and on an older camera body, combined with on camera flash. That's not conducive to great portraiture and judging by your signature you're much better equipped nowadays.
Just because Kevin's looking away doesn't mean that I'm not feeling the connection. Portraits don't have to have eye contact. However they definitely, with a few deliberate exceptions, need to have eyes as the focal point of the image.
If you're going to photograph Kevin again when you see him, try to find some sympathetic light. In the shade, with ambient light bounced and softened before it reaches his face. Or alternatively if you want a grittier image then to for harsh light. But try different lighting situations to get different end results. If you're in bright sunlight and the sun is high then there will be harsh shadows - see if you can use a white card or reflector (either on the floor or held by Kevin) to bounce some of that light to fill the shadows. If you're getting in close remember that whatever light modifiers you've used may end up as catchlights in the eyes, so be warned against using anything too irregular (I'm thinking of car sunscreens with advertising on, here!)