For me, Ernie, if you are going to try an edit, like your last version, you really need to use layers with carefully edited masking to control the brightness/saturation levels around the scene, as required.
I suspect there will be several versions before you finally make a decision on which will become the keeper, or indeed several keepers.
Incidentally, I shot something similar last evening, although with somewhat different subjects. Tried a couple of edits from several shots today, but I'm still not sure which, if any, will be my keepers.