Cyber Ninja

[Shadowman]

Armed with a 40mm lens, sitting at the back of a small venue. The Artist Ximone.

[truonda]

Interesting shot. It's almost symmetrical but not quite.

[Mark von Kanel]

Hi John i came back to this thread several times hoping that someone would manage to pinpoint my problems with it, as they havnt, ill have a go! hope you dont mind.

i like th PP almost 1960's? look ultra retro! im not sure about the comp angle though but it looks like a crowded place so it cant have been an easy shot to compose in the first place.

The uneven slope of the paperwork on the wall makes it look slightly odd.

If you could clone out the head in the bottom left and complete the shadow of the dancer it would make the shot work really well.

[IzzieK]

What bothers me John is the head near the legs. The other two audience on the side frames the shot at least. Still it needs to be straighten up? Or is she really curvy? Hey it is your shot...just ignore me...

[nimitzbenedicto]

HI John,

Hey your creative juices are acting up. Maybe just a lil more and Sharon will suely appreciate your vision.
(btw, like you, I miss Sharon's creations.)

If someone asks me my version: like Izzie, sort of straighten it. Crop upper part. Perhaps vignette.

[Shadowman]

Interesting shot. It's almost symmetrical but not quite.

Thanks Daniel. Lot of distracting elements to attend to.

[Shadowman]

Hi John i came back to this thread several times hoping that someone would manage to pinpoint my problems with it, as they havnt, ill have a go! hope you dont mind.

i like th PP almost 1960's? look ultra retro! im not sure about the comp angle though but it looks like a crowded place so it cant have been an easy shot to compose in the first place.

The uneven slope of the paperwork on the wall makes it look slightly odd.

If you could clone out the head in the bottom left and complete the shadow of the dancer it would make the shot work really well.

Hi Mark,

Thanks for the comments and critique. I agree there are distractions, I'll give your suggestions a try.

[Shadowman]

HI John,

Hey your creative juices are acting up. Maybe just a lil more and Sharon will suely appreciate your vision.
(btw, like you, I miss Sharon's creations.)

If someone asks me my version: like Izzie, sort of straighten it. Crop upper part. Perhaps vignette.

Victor,

Thanks for the comments and suggestions. Yes, it was one of those art inspired weekends, trying to work in less than desirable settings.

[Shadowman]

What bothers me John is the head near the legs. The other two audience on the side frames the shot at least. Still it needs to be straighten up? Or is she really curvy? Hey it is your shot...just ignore me...

Izzie,

I'd never ignore you, always appreciate your comments.

[Shadowman]

Three versions.

Rotated

Rotated with vignette

Rotated, vignette, film grain.

[Mark von Kanel]

No 1 has my vote youve transformed it, well done! though if the vignette wash quite so hard the other 2 would be just as good

[Shadowman]

No 1 has my vote youve transformed it, well done! though if the vignette wash quite so hard the other 2 would be just as good

Mark,

Thanks for the comments.

[bnnrcn]

Hi John, edit #1 for me too

[Shadowman]

Hi John, edit #1 for me too

Thanks Binnur.