Some questions and considerations, in no order of priority:
I don’t understand “Full Frame”. The image is not 3:4 Aspect Ratio, so it must have been cropped, on the short side from the ‘Full Frame” file: ‘as shot’?This is full frame.
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Good choice of Shutter Speed. Good choice of Focal Length: especially for a Front-on Shot, you need the compression (read more below).ISO 1000; 1/800s; F4; 200mm
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Good choice to light them that way for the goal that you set for yourself.my goal was to get a dramatic shot which displays how I see them [“The power, grace, and determination of an Equestrian”].
I wanted the only light on them to be the light coming from the very large windows on picture left.
I was not allowed in the ring, so this really limited my position, angles, etc.
Good choice to shoot square on to realize your goal, but also realize that you having made that choice to shoot head on, usually the Subject has to be very strong to acquire hard side light and the front on pose. She is very strong. But so is the Horse. Even though the Horse is subordinate to the rider in position, the Horse occupies a large area of the Image Real Estate. I do agree with the comments that the Horse is stronger in the particular image, as it is presented.
You will probably find that if the Subject (and the Horse) were about ⅛ Profile (in this case toward Camera Right so that the Window Light runs along the length of the Horse), you will better be able to use the sunlit side of the horse to lead into the Subject, rather than have the Horse’s (well defined and well muscled) Forequarters acting as a barrier to the Subject.
The Camera Elevation slightly emphasises the Horse’s dominance. It’s understood that a step-ladder would have been impractical, but a Technique (not always a successful technique) that you might consider to try next time to get the camera higher is to shoot ‘Hail Mary – Doorstop Style’.
If you ever chose this option, then also choose to shoot a little bit wider, around 100mm for that Shooting Distance should be manageable for a novice; also if you do use this technique, stick a finger over the viewfinder if you are using an Automatic Camera Mode, but for “Hail Mary” it is best to use Manual Camera Mode if you can; and this is also one technique where pulling several shots (scatter gun mode) is a good idea.
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However, I do think that the shot that you have made can come closer to better realizing your goals.
I wonder where the edges on the short side went? I think that you need them. The very skinny vertical cropping emphasises the strength of the Horse, over the Rider.
I think that the squarer the Framing and the Tighter the HORSE is cropped, (to remove as much of the Forequarter area as possible) the more equal that the Rider and the Horse will become in their juxtaposition to each other.
So I would crop the Horse: the Horse’s expression on its face is strong enough to stand alone and on that merit of strength which it exhibits.
I also agree that the background to black would make more drama and that would emphasise the expression on the Rider’s face, and the emotion of ‘determination’: interpreted that she is exiting from ‘darkness’ (the beginning) into ‘control’ (of the event which is upcoming).
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Kim, does this (ROUGH ONLY) redo represent some/many if the goals that you had as your Vision for this shoot?
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Presently I am involved in a long (mostly philosophical) conversation about Titles (for all works of Art, including Photographs): One of the points which I’m arguing, is that the Photograph (Art Work) needs to stand alone and to be critiqued and judged alone, without Title, because ‘A Title’ can and will initially bias the viewer
In so far as taking this image and measuring it against the argument of letting it stand alone and for it not to have a Title, I think that this image portrays a definitive story that is certainly obviously premised in attributes of ‘power’ and also ‘determination’.
In this respect, noting that Kim set about this task to achieve a clearly defined goal, the image is an example that the particular genre of Candid Portrait Photography certainly warrants that the Photographer has and executes an agenda and formulates a plan for the execution of that agenda.
Having an agenda and also the plan to execute it, results in this quality of work which is obviously far superior work generally and also contains a greater depth and meaning than either of Kim’s previous images: “Little Girl” and “Sheep Girl”.
In these respects: Excellent work and excellent progress. This is certainly a P.B. Now get back in and improve on it.
Brava.
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