Two Feathers for C&C

[russellsnr]

Hi, trying something new and would like some feedback please or suggestions to make it better.
I use a Godox AD360 from the right.
Canon 6D
90m Macro lens.
Thanks for looking.
Russ.
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[Dave A]

I like the first image a lot.

Dave

[Shadowman]

I like the first as well, the yellow at the base is interesting yet distracting.

[Dave Humphries]

Difficult to C&C helpfully without knowing the camera EXIF and flash data Russ,

Simple observation leads me to say;

There would seem to be lost data in the shadows of the first, perhaps a reflector (sheet of paper) could have been used?
Agree with John that the blown bit lower left corner of first is a distraction.

Both lack DoF.

I don't know if you rotated these after capture, but to my eyes, the direction of light doesn't match your description of "from the right" as the main source.

Dave

[bje07]

Both lack DoF.

+ 1
and, for me, flash too present left corner on # 1 and insufficient flash coverage on # 2..... but they don't fly away, you can redo the pictures