While you have the whole scene in your head, the viewers of your image do not. Had the missing photographer been part of the image, then this particular view might have worked, but that is not the case here. We only see what is in the image.
There is simply too much extraneous material competing with your subject. It does not work well as an environmental portrait as the background you are showing is not what the photographer is shooting as a background. There are just too many distracting elements in the image itself, especially the bright reflections on the ground on the right corner of the shot. You appear to have tried to make your subject stand out by globally darkening the image and have added a noticeable vignette. These are not really working all that well.
You have given your subject a lot of space to look into; so this is definitely the right direction, but does she need quite that much space? Probably not.
A strong crop on the right and lightening up the shot might be worth considering.
I think that I see what you noticed in this shot. The lady in your image is quite attractive and seems graceful!
I did a lot of shooting of people posing for other photographers while I was in China... I liked this one from Shanghai best - possibly because the lady is so attractive. The "V" sign with the fingers was extremely common while Chinese were having their picture shot...
I think that I like this type of shot cropped fairly close to the subject. However, as an environmental portrait; sometimes including the photographer or photographers works...
Last edited by rpcrowe; 7th June 2018 at 04:40 PM.
Ole,
Nice effort, I too like to do this type of capture but usually with the subject nearly facing my camera or position; however I have posted a few "stolen glances" type SP shots.
If you hadn't described the situation, I would have assumed you had (almost) caught the subject glancing back longingly at the 50% Sale sign.