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    Does it work for you?

    Hi, and Merry Christmas to everyone!

    I would like to know if this image works for you...

    Does it work for you?

    Cheers,
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    Re: Does it work for you?

    It almost works. The top left reminds me of single stars and a star cluster. If there were more stars and clusters or perhaps a nebula? But as is it is an interesting effort.
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    Re: Does it work for you?

    It works for me, nicely done.

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    Re: Does it work for you?

    I very much enjoy the lines! However, the change in light at the top is a bit distracting. Perhaps a crop to focus our eyes on the lines more would be better. When I scroll down and show the image from just below that portion, it's a lot more interesting and abstract to me. Perhaps something like that could work at the bottom too to keep a balance in the photograph.

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    Re: Does it work for you?

    Guys, thanks for your comments. All of them are always taken into account. Monique, I played with your suggestion and came out with this:

    Does it work for you?

    Regards,

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    Re: Does it work for you?

    Quote Originally Posted by Otavio View Post
    Guys, thanks for your comments. All of them are always taken into account. Monique, I played with your suggestion and came out with this:

    Does it work for you?

    Regards,

    Ooh! I like this! It's very intriguing this way! Looking great!

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    Re: Does it work for you?

    Quote Originally Posted by Yuukon View Post
    Ooh! I like this! It's very intriguing this way! Looking great!
    Thanks, Monique!

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    Re: Does it work for you?

    My first thoughts were the same as Monique. The tighter crop is too tight for me. I would keep the top and bottom mostly similar to the original but lose the over exposed area on the left with a mix of crop and clone. Maybe end up with square or 4 x 5 ratio?

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    Re: Does it work for you?

    I would suggest working the scene a bit more. Abstract images are challenging to do because none of the visual cues people are used to seeing can be found in the shot. The simple colours and repeating patterns are a solid approach, but the lighting and the white flecks (I assume these are from the cutting process that made the shapes?) are significant distractions.

    In my view, you are closer to an image that works well in the first posting, rather than in the second one.

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    Re: Does it work for you?

    definitely better.

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    Re: Does it work for you?

    Quote Originally Posted by Geoff F View Post
    My first thoughts were the same as Monique. The tighter crop is too tight for me. I would keep the top and bottom mostly similar to the original but lose the over exposed area on the left with a mix of crop and clone. Maybe end up with square or 4 x 5 ratio?
    Thanks, Geoff, for your feedback. Regards,

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    Re: Does it work for you?

    Quote Originally Posted by Manfred M View Post
    In my view, you are closer to an image that works well in the first posting, rather than in the second one.
    That's pretty common (and funny) with abstract works. Some preferred the first version, some liked the cropped one better. I will play a bit more with the original. Thanks for your feedback. Kindest regards,

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    Re: Does it work for you?

    Quote Originally Posted by JBW View Post
    definitely better.
    Thanks, Brian, for your feedback. Regards,

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